I've made a few changes to part one, after a few ideas presented themselves to me (thanks to BBM for her help as well). So here's the updated first chapter.
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-Martial Academy, 4:30 AM; October 21st, 2002-
(Unknown character) *enters dormitory room* Hey DJ! Wake up…we need to get over to the mission office quick if we want to get assigned to that job in Ireland you were talking about! Come on!
(DJ) [just waking up] Ugh…just a minute Jake. *groggily sits up* I don’t think that mission would have been claimed this early. It’s only, what, *looks at clock* 4:30 in the morning? You’re the only cadet that would be up this time of the morning.
(Jake) Should I have not woken you up? You were the one talking about how great the Ireland mission sounded last night. I just wanted to make sure we got it. Consider this an early birthday present for you! Now come on, let’s go already!
(DJ) I don’t know how you do it Jake…I’m still dead tired. Tell you what: you go on over to the mission office, and I’ll be there in a few minutes. I’ve just got to get my things together first.
(Jake) Alright. *exits room and jogs toward the mission office*
[4:35 AM]
(Mission office aide) Yes, the mission in Ireland is still available.
(Jake) Great! I’d like to accept it, along with DJ.
(MO aide) I will need to see your ID cards to make sure you both have proper clearance for this assignment.
(Jake) Ok. *hands aide his ID* DJ should be here in a minute…
(MO aide) *takes card and enters it into computer* Alright, Jake, it looks like you are all set.
(DJ) *enters the mission office* I’m here. *walks over to counter and gives ID card to aide*
(MO aide) Good morning. *enters card into computer* Ok, you’re ready to go, DJ. I’ll print out two briefing reports for you.
(Jake) Yes! This should be a good one.
(MO aide) Just don’t forget that you’re still on assignment…this is a serious mission. Ah, your reports are ready. *hands reports to DJ*
(DJ) Yes ma’am, we won’t forget. *turns to Jake* So, when do you want to leave? It’s about a four-hour flight if we get a good speeder.
(Jake) It should take us about half an hour to get our gear ready and sign out a speeder. How about we leave at six o’clock? That way we’ll have a little extra time to do stuff before we leave.
(DJ) That sounds good to me. *Hands Jake one of the briefing reports* I’ll see you in an hour or so. *DJ and Jake leave the mission office* *as DJ is walking back toward the dorms, he suddenly stops* Oh no! Melody! *facepalm*
[5:30 AM]
(DJ) *finishes packing things up and walks to the lounge on the west side of the academy, near the ladies’ section* I hope she won’t mind this too much. I can’t believe I forgot about taking her out tonight…I’m so dead. *arrives at the lounge, sits down at one of the tables, and pulls out his breakfast* Well, I guess we’ll find out soon enough.
[5:45 AM]
(Girl) *walks into the lounge and over to the table DJ is sitting at* *smiles* Morning, DJ! I hope you have a good reason for dragging me away from my dreams.
(DJ) *gets up and gives the girl a hug* Hi Melody! I’m sorry for waking you so early, but it is for a good reason, trust me. *both he and Melody sit down at the table, and DJ hands her a cinnamon bun out of his bag*
(Melody) My favorite! You must have something important then. Is it about tonight?
(DJ) I’m afraid so. You remember the Ireland trip Jake and I were talking about earlier, right? He signed us on to it this morning…
(Melody) He did?! But what about our dinner?
(DJ) It completely slipped my mind until I got out of the office. And you know how it is…no backing out now.
(Melody) *sighs* I know. Well, you owe me one now! I expect an extra-special dinner when you get back!
(DJ) *smiles* Definitely. Thanks for understanding…I really appreciate it.
(Melody) I know how much you were looking forward to this. I also want to do another training session with you afterwards, just so you know.
(DJ) Let me think about that one… *pretends to look in an organizer* Yup, I think I can pencil you in! *laughs*
(Melody) *giggles* Yay! It’ll be fun, I promise! I’ve been practicing, you know.
(DJ) Can’t wait! *pager goes off* Woah, I’ve got to head over to the garage pretty quick. I’ll see you when I get back!
(Melody) Alright. Just promise me you’ll be safe, ok?
(DJ) I promise. *squeezes Melody’s hand and gets up* Love you!
(Melody) Love you too. *smiles*
(DJ) *waves* Bye… *leaves the lounge*
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[9:10 AM] -Somewhere over the Atlantic Ocean-
(Jake) I can’t believe you managed to get us one of the proto-experimental speeders! This thing’s going almost 900 miles an hour!
(DJ) It is pretty incredible, isn’t it? At this rate, we’ll be there half an hour early. That should actually give us time to pick up souvenirs or something for once. I can’t remember the last time we’ve been able to do that! I definitely have to find something for Melody after this morning.
(Jake) I know! They really keep us on a busy schedule with these things, don’t they?
(DJ) They sure do. Hey, since we’re almost there, we ought to go over the mission details again just to make sure we don’t forget anything. First, we’re landing just outside Letterkenny, where we’ll meet our contact for the mission. We’ll be debriefed, and then transported to the basic area of the bunker we have to find. They haven’t found the actual location because of some sort of radar jamming, I guess. Not to mention it’s a heavily wooded area.
(Jake) Then, we scout out the area around the bunker, disable any security measures they have, and look for any alternate entrances. And then we infiltrate from the least guarded entrance.
(DJ) If we find that infiltration via their entrances doesn’t work, we may have to create a way in. The group we’re meeting has already planned for this and will be providing us certain tools to aid us in this possibility.
(Jake) I hope you mean explosives. Because that would be awesome!
(DJ) Haha, that it would. At any rate, once we get inside the bunker, we’re supposed to enter negotiations with the leader. We’ve been asked to keep the casualties to a minimum, in order to learn as much as we can from them. This is one of the key cells in the AETO, and the information we get from this op could be vital in saving thousands of lives.
(Jake) Yeah, I understand. Just try not to be too serious, DJ.
(DJ) Fair enough. I just want you to not be too reckless at the same time. Alright, time to initiate the landing sequence…we’re almost over land now. We’ll be on the ground in less than five minutes. You ready for this?
Monday, April 19, 2010
Part Four (completed)
[12: 20]
(Yashev) *returns back to the holding room DJ is in, accompanied by two guards* Hello again, my young friend. It seems that the machine is in perfect order, so it’s time for you to come join us in the laboratory.
(DJ) Cool. Does this mean I’m going to go down in history as the first person ever to be duplicated, or whatever this thing does?
(Yashev) We don’t even know if it works on humans yet…there’s a good chance you could be killed during a failure of some sort. And even if it does work, there can be some pretty nasty side effects…but I won’t get into those right now. No need to get all worked up about minor details, right?
(DJ) Whatever you say, doc.
(Yashev) Good, then we’re all done here. Guards, take him to chamber A.
(Guards) *in unison* Yes sir! *guards unchain DJ from the wall and carry him into the lab area*
(DJ) Wow, I even get personal escorts! Talk about living the high life.
(Yashev) Ugh, I can’t stand your incessant babbling any more. Can someone please sedate him? Besides, we don’t want a struggle.
(Scientist) Of course. *carries syringe with a heavy sedative in it and injects DJ with it*
(DJ) Ooh, picky. *the drug works quickly, and in a matter of seconds, DJ is unconscious again*
(Yashev) Thank you. Now, shall we continue? Just put him into the duplicator pod, please.
*guards carry the now limp DJ and place him in the duplicator pod*
(Scientist) *walks back over to computer station* All ready, sir?
(Yashev) Yes, let’s get this moving before sleeping beauty over there pulls something. Start it up.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *initates the duplicator, and flashes of light can be seen coming from the pod* Now, we’re supposed to leave it alone until the lights stop, and then we initiate the safety release of the other pods.
(Yashev) And about how long do you think this will take?
(Scientist) Typically around ten to twenty minutes, sir.
(Yashev) *rolls eyes* Great. *walks over to waiting area and sits down*
[12:52]
(Yashev) *very impatiently* You said it should have been done by now! What’s going on here?!
(Scientist) I…I’m sorry sir! We’ve h..hit some unexpected delays with the procedure! It shouldn’t be more than a few more minutes.
(Yashev) It’d better not! Or else I’ll be needing a replacement for your position…and somewhere to dump a body. *suddenly, the lights on the machine go out and the computer monitor flashes a ‘complete’ message* Ah, it looks like you’ll be staying with us after all. Release pods B and C into the safety chamber.
(Scientist) Y..yes sir! *hurries over to the computer and opens the chambers*
*As the doors open, one body steps out of each pod into the steamy Plexiglas-enclosed viewing area. Both of the clones step forward simultaneously and look out through the glass, their minds racing with new thoughts and emotions*
(Yashev) It worked! Two perfect duplicates! And they look exactly like DJ as well! I suppose they’ll shape-shift a little as we train them, and that’ll be good. How does that work exactly?
(Scientist) As they are trained, they change form to match the emotions and feelings they have. The shifting ends after about a week, so this needs to be done quickly. However, we can pretty much manipulate their environment to form them however we want. We should hurry and get them into their computer-generated holding facilities before they retain too many memories of this. But whatever we do, we CANNOT let them get in the same room as the original. That would have immensely bad effects on our clones.
(Yashev) I see. *calls to guards* Please escort these two to their rooms. And do it gently. We don’t need them having any negative thoughts just yet.
*guards come and move the clones to holding rooms with computer-generated environments*
(Yashev) Excellent. Now, let’s deal with the original. Hopefully he survived the procedure…we’ll need him if we’re to proceed with the building of our army of clones. This is a huge success for us…they’ll never suspect a thing until it’s far too late! Things are going exactly as planned.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *walks over to the pod where DJ is and presses the release button to open it*
(DJ) *as the door opens, DJ quickly strikes the scientist, dropping him to the floor* HA! For Melody!
(Yashev) YOU! I KNEW the project took too long…the sedative wore off already…ah well, it matters not. *slams his fist into the alarm mechanism* You’re too late! *the two guards burst into the room, guns drawn* Now, surrender or I’ll be forced to kill you! And we both know that that won’t work for either of us.
(DJ) Never! *dives forward and rolls toward Yashev, landing a hard blow to his stomach as he comes out of the roll*
(Yashev) Ugh… *staggers backwards* Get him! Shoot! *the guards open fire, but DJ dives out of the way* *instead of hitting DJ, the bullets find their way to the open pod* No! *instantly, the machine catches on fire* It’s gonna blow! Get out of here! *starts running, leaving DJ and the guards in the room*
(DJ) Hey! I’m not through with you yet! Coward! *looks over at the two guards, who are trying to decide whether to shoot at DJ again or run* Shoo! Get out of here before I decide to kill you where you stand!
*At that moment, the first machine explodes, sending shrapnel toward everyone, shattering the plexiglass and catching the other machines on fire* *the guards look at each other, then run after Yashev toward the exit*
(DJ) Yeah, that’s right! I’d better get out of here myself…but I need to get those duplicates out first. *looks at the control panel for the bunker* Ah, this thing’s too complicated! *starts hitting everything on the panel, but the other pods explode and short out the entire building’s power* Aack! I hope whatever I did worked…I’ve got to get out quick, before the entire building comes down! Hopefully the others can find their way out *shouts* HEY! If you can here me, get out of the bunker! It’s gonna burn down! *starts running cautiously toward where he thinks the exit is*
(Yashev) *stands outside the bunker with the two guards and one of the clones* We can rebuild somewhere else! We have this clone, so DJ has no real use, I suppose. Better cut my losses…sorry, my friend. *activates timed explosives around the bunker* Now, let’s get out of here before the entire thing goes up!
(DJ) Aha! There’s sunlight up there, that’s got to be the exit! *as he’s running toward the light, he suddenly bumps into someone else, knocking him over* Look out!
(??) Ow!
(DJ) *stops dead, because the person sounds exactly like he does* You…you’re one of the clones! *helps him up* We’ve got to get out of here!
(Clone) Ok. *lets DJ lead him out of the bunker*
(DJ) Come on! *as the pair reaches the forest, the entire bunker explodes and is blown to hundreds of pieces, throwing them both to the ground*
(Yashev) *returns back to the holding room DJ is in, accompanied by two guards* Hello again, my young friend. It seems that the machine is in perfect order, so it’s time for you to come join us in the laboratory.
(DJ) Cool. Does this mean I’m going to go down in history as the first person ever to be duplicated, or whatever this thing does?
(Yashev) We don’t even know if it works on humans yet…there’s a good chance you could be killed during a failure of some sort. And even if it does work, there can be some pretty nasty side effects…but I won’t get into those right now. No need to get all worked up about minor details, right?
(DJ) Whatever you say, doc.
(Yashev) Good, then we’re all done here. Guards, take him to chamber A.
(Guards) *in unison* Yes sir! *guards unchain DJ from the wall and carry him into the lab area*
(DJ) Wow, I even get personal escorts! Talk about living the high life.
(Yashev) Ugh, I can’t stand your incessant babbling any more. Can someone please sedate him? Besides, we don’t want a struggle.
(Scientist) Of course. *carries syringe with a heavy sedative in it and injects DJ with it*
(DJ) Ooh, picky. *the drug works quickly, and in a matter of seconds, DJ is unconscious again*
(Yashev) Thank you. Now, shall we continue? Just put him into the duplicator pod, please.
*guards carry the now limp DJ and place him in the duplicator pod*
(Scientist) *walks back over to computer station* All ready, sir?
(Yashev) Yes, let’s get this moving before sleeping beauty over there pulls something. Start it up.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *initates the duplicator, and flashes of light can be seen coming from the pod* Now, we’re supposed to leave it alone until the lights stop, and then we initiate the safety release of the other pods.
(Yashev) And about how long do you think this will take?
(Scientist) Typically around ten to twenty minutes, sir.
(Yashev) *rolls eyes* Great. *walks over to waiting area and sits down*
[12:52]
(Yashev) *very impatiently* You said it should have been done by now! What’s going on here?!
(Scientist) I…I’m sorry sir! We’ve h..hit some unexpected delays with the procedure! It shouldn’t be more than a few more minutes.
(Yashev) It’d better not! Or else I’ll be needing a replacement for your position…and somewhere to dump a body. *suddenly, the lights on the machine go out and the computer monitor flashes a ‘complete’ message* Ah, it looks like you’ll be staying with us after all. Release pods B and C into the safety chamber.
(Scientist) Y..yes sir! *hurries over to the computer and opens the chambers*
*As the doors open, one body steps out of each pod into the steamy Plexiglas-enclosed viewing area. Both of the clones step forward simultaneously and look out through the glass, their minds racing with new thoughts and emotions*
(Yashev) It worked! Two perfect duplicates! And they look exactly like DJ as well! I suppose they’ll shape-shift a little as we train them, and that’ll be good. How does that work exactly?
(Scientist) As they are trained, they change form to match the emotions and feelings they have. The shifting ends after about a week, so this needs to be done quickly. However, we can pretty much manipulate their environment to form them however we want. We should hurry and get them into their computer-generated holding facilities before they retain too many memories of this. But whatever we do, we CANNOT let them get in the same room as the original. That would have immensely bad effects on our clones.
(Yashev) I see. *calls to guards* Please escort these two to their rooms. And do it gently. We don’t need them having any negative thoughts just yet.
*guards come and move the clones to holding rooms with computer-generated environments*
(Yashev) Excellent. Now, let’s deal with the original. Hopefully he survived the procedure…we’ll need him if we’re to proceed with the building of our army of clones. This is a huge success for us…they’ll never suspect a thing until it’s far too late! Things are going exactly as planned.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *walks over to the pod where DJ is and presses the release button to open it*
(DJ) *as the door opens, DJ quickly strikes the scientist, dropping him to the floor* HA! For Melody!
(Yashev) YOU! I KNEW the project took too long…the sedative wore off already…ah well, it matters not. *slams his fist into the alarm mechanism* You’re too late! *the two guards burst into the room, guns drawn* Now, surrender or I’ll be forced to kill you! And we both know that that won’t work for either of us.
(DJ) Never! *dives forward and rolls toward Yashev, landing a hard blow to his stomach as he comes out of the roll*
(Yashev) Ugh… *staggers backwards* Get him! Shoot! *the guards open fire, but DJ dives out of the way* *instead of hitting DJ, the bullets find their way to the open pod* No! *instantly, the machine catches on fire* It’s gonna blow! Get out of here! *starts running, leaving DJ and the guards in the room*
(DJ) Hey! I’m not through with you yet! Coward! *looks over at the two guards, who are trying to decide whether to shoot at DJ again or run* Shoo! Get out of here before I decide to kill you where you stand!
*At that moment, the first machine explodes, sending shrapnel toward everyone, shattering the plexiglass and catching the other machines on fire* *the guards look at each other, then run after Yashev toward the exit*
(DJ) Yeah, that’s right! I’d better get out of here myself…but I need to get those duplicates out first. *looks at the control panel for the bunker* Ah, this thing’s too complicated! *starts hitting everything on the panel, but the other pods explode and short out the entire building’s power* Aack! I hope whatever I did worked…I’ve got to get out quick, before the entire building comes down! Hopefully the others can find their way out *shouts* HEY! If you can here me, get out of the bunker! It’s gonna burn down! *starts running cautiously toward where he thinks the exit is*
(Yashev) *stands outside the bunker with the two guards and one of the clones* We can rebuild somewhere else! We have this clone, so DJ has no real use, I suppose. Better cut my losses…sorry, my friend. *activates timed explosives around the bunker* Now, let’s get out of here before the entire thing goes up!
(DJ) Aha! There’s sunlight up there, that’s got to be the exit! *as he’s running toward the light, he suddenly bumps into someone else, knocking him over* Look out!
(??) Ow!
(DJ) *stops dead, because the person sounds exactly like he does* You…you’re one of the clones! *helps him up* We’ve got to get out of here!
(Clone) Ok. *lets DJ lead him out of the bunker*
(DJ) Come on! *as the pair reaches the forest, the entire bunker explodes and is blown to hundreds of pieces, throwing them both to the ground*
Friday, April 2, 2010
Part Four (mostly)
Apologies once again for being so tardy to the party (just in case you're reading, C... XD ) with this. Being busy with school, more school, getting ready to move, and more school means I've had next to no time for writing. And I'm considering making a change from pure dialogue to more third-person. So the next time I post, it might be in a completely different way than last time. Enjoy (what little I have to offer)!
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(Yashev) *returns back to the holding room DJ is in, accompanied by two guards* Hello again, my young friend. It seems that the machine is in perfect order, so it’s time for you to come join us in the laboratory.
(DJ) Cool. Does this mean I’m going to go down in history as the first person ever to be duplicated, or whatever this thing does?
(Yashev) We don’t even know if it works on humans yet…there’s a good chance you could be killed during a failure of some sort. And even if it does work, there can be some pretty nasty side effects…but I won’t get into those right now. No need to get all worked up about minor details, right?
(DJ) Whatever you say, doc.
(Yashev) Good, then we’re all done here. Guards, take him to chamber A.
(Guards) *in unison* Yes sir! *guards unchain DJ from the wall and carry him into the lab area*
(DJ) Wow, I even get personal escorts! Talk about living the high life.
(Yashev) Ugh, I can’t stand your incessant babbling any more. Can someone please sedate him? Besides, we don’t want a struggle.
(Scientist) Of course. *carries syringe with a heavy sedative in it and injects DJ with it*
(DJ) Ooh, picky. *the drug works quickly, and in a matter of seconds, DJ is unconscious again*
(Yashev) Thank you. Now, shall we continue? Just put him into the duplicator pod, please.
*guards carry the now limp DJ and place him in the duplicator pod*
(Scientist) *walks back over to computer station* All ready, sir?
(Yashev) Yes, let’s get this moving before sleeping beauty over there pulls something. Start it up.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *initates the duplicator, and flashes of light can be seen coming from the pod* Now, we’re supposed to leave it alone until the lights stop, and then we initiate the safety release of the other pods.
(Yashev) And about how long do you think this will take?
(Scientist) Typically around ten to twenty minutes, sir.
(Yashev) *rolls eyes* Great. *walks over to waiting area and sits down*
[12:52]
(Yashev) *very impatiently* You said it should have been done by now! What’s going on here?!
(Scientist) I…I’m sorry sir! We’ve h..hit some unexpected delays with the procedure! It shouldn’t be more than a few more minutes.
(Yashev) It’d better not! Or else I’ll be needing a replacement for your position…and somewhere to dump a body. *suddenly, the lights on the machine go out and the computer monitor flashes a ‘complete’ message* Ah, it looks like you’ll be staying with us after all. Release pods B and C into the safety chamber.
(Scientist) Y..yes sir! *hurries over to the computer and opens the chambers*
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(Yashev) *returns back to the holding room DJ is in, accompanied by two guards* Hello again, my young friend. It seems that the machine is in perfect order, so it’s time for you to come join us in the laboratory.
(DJ) Cool. Does this mean I’m going to go down in history as the first person ever to be duplicated, or whatever this thing does?
(Yashev) We don’t even know if it works on humans yet…there’s a good chance you could be killed during a failure of some sort. And even if it does work, there can be some pretty nasty side effects…but I won’t get into those right now. No need to get all worked up about minor details, right?
(DJ) Whatever you say, doc.
(Yashev) Good, then we’re all done here. Guards, take him to chamber A.
(Guards) *in unison* Yes sir! *guards unchain DJ from the wall and carry him into the lab area*
(DJ) Wow, I even get personal escorts! Talk about living the high life.
(Yashev) Ugh, I can’t stand your incessant babbling any more. Can someone please sedate him? Besides, we don’t want a struggle.
(Scientist) Of course. *carries syringe with a heavy sedative in it and injects DJ with it*
(DJ) Ooh, picky. *the drug works quickly, and in a matter of seconds, DJ is unconscious again*
(Yashev) Thank you. Now, shall we continue? Just put him into the duplicator pod, please.
*guards carry the now limp DJ and place him in the duplicator pod*
(Scientist) *walks back over to computer station* All ready, sir?
(Yashev) Yes, let’s get this moving before sleeping beauty over there pulls something. Start it up.
(Scientist) Aye, sir. *initates the duplicator, and flashes of light can be seen coming from the pod* Now, we’re supposed to leave it alone until the lights stop, and then we initiate the safety release of the other pods.
(Yashev) And about how long do you think this will take?
(Scientist) Typically around ten to twenty minutes, sir.
(Yashev) *rolls eyes* Great. *walks over to waiting area and sits down*
[12:52]
(Yashev) *very impatiently* You said it should have been done by now! What’s going on here?!
(Scientist) I…I’m sorry sir! We’ve h..hit some unexpected delays with the procedure! It shouldn’t be more than a few more minutes.
(Yashev) It’d better not! Or else I’ll be needing a replacement for your position…and somewhere to dump a body. *suddenly, the lights on the machine go out and the computer monitor flashes a ‘complete’ message* Ah, it looks like you’ll be staying with us after all. Release pods B and C into the safety chamber.
(Scientist) Y..yes sir! *hurries over to the computer and opens the chambers*
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